Thursday, July 30, 2009

Peace




dull words move ratchety
clunky like squared wheels

stuck in my head--useless repeated detritus:
like
you know
clearly
hopefully
awesome
basically
actually
embolden (thanks dick)
to be honest
so . . . on and on

Oh to string a set so perfect
you could wear them like proud pearls

words giddy with anticipation
of expression flowing rhyming
with exact timing
smoothing the edges perfect hedges
found meaning in words revealing


Down a path of morning light not too bright
to a dunesandy edge of the open sea
edge of the world where succinct and understanding
live in secret places waiting to be found

I wish I had a map

12 comments:

  1. You've already found them. How creative this is...

    "words giddy with anticipation"...I love this line and the way you led up to it.

    I hope you're feeling better, these days, and being patient before tackling any big physical jobs.

    Thanks for the post...it was lovely and flowed really well.

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  2. "words giddy with anticipation"...I love this line too. :o) hugs for you

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  3. dull words move ratchety
    clunky like squared wheels


    I know that feeling very well. Often I will have an idea for a great story smoothly rolling around in my head until I get home and everything then becomes clumsy and vague.

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  4. I so enjoyed your poem!
    Your lines, "words giddy with anticipation"...loved them!

    Also loved, "oh to string a set so perfect
    you could wear them like proud pearls"

    Hope you are feeling much better.

    Take care of yourself!

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  5. lol. So often I've wished I had a map too :)

    But you seem to be doing pretty well, goatman. I loved the last two verses.

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  6. "edge of the world where succinct and understanding
    live in secret places waiting to be found

    I wish I had a map"

    surreal. Lately .. have been to such lovely places that I've started believing in the whimsical. I loved that part... though maps confuse me further .. but then I can always ask for your help :)

    I trust you are recovering well and we'd get to read more on your space..
    take care.

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  7. Hi-
    Thank you for your visit and kind words over at my place. Did I miss the outcome to all those medical tests?
    I feel some intensity and anxiety and hope and faith and love and a swerl of emotions. So glad we found each other, You are my type of person. :-)

    Love to you
    Gail
    peace.....

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  8. Very nice and it goes really well with the picture which is beautiful.

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  9. Love these playful, poetic spikes! Sweet icing in Macarthur Park with a tinge of spicey rain! Just beautiful in a most unique way!

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  10. nice pic.....
    reminds me of an adventorous road i took in one of my trips to the hills!!
    and having a map is so boring!!!

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  11. i always love the way you construct your lines. what else can i say? nurture your gift! :)

    keep safe!

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  12. this is so good

    to string a set so perfect
    well this is pretty good, i'd be glad to own it

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